Saturday, September 15, 2012

I have been thinking a lot about the feedback I received from critique on last week, looking back on all that was said, but most importantly, how does this story end? From there I thought better ways to make the story as a whole flow.
The ending was not there all the way, but I have it, I have all three parts; beginning, middle and end.

Beginning - A woman of a starving household receives a chip implant(mark of the beast). An act that separates her from God. She acts against what she and her family believe as an attempt to feed her hungry family.

Middle - Even though this woman is able to receive fresh groceries for her family, the chickens the family depended on before stop laying eggs and get sick. At the same time the grandmother becomes weak. The mom connects the illness of her grandmother and the chickens to her getting the chip.

End - The woman who received the chip remembers the scripture "Wherefore if thy hand or thy foot offend thee, cut them off, and cast them from thee: it is better for thee to enter into life halt or maimed, rather than having two hands or two feet to be cast into everlasting fire."
The woman then chops off her hand with the chip, hoping that it will restore her relationship with God and her connection with her family. Final scene we see the entire family at the dinner table, the mom's hand wrapped in gauze.

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